Angelus
Junior
Suzume's Squishy Student - Angelus[M:2120][M:1100]
A Dark Past...
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Post by Angelus on Nov 8, 2006 9:34:17 GMT -5
Angelus lay on the ground next to the wall unconscious. He was able to regain consciousness, however, when water awoke him. The water was beginning to fill the black room and Angelus could feel his body floating on top of the water. "What is he planning to do," Angelus thought to himself?"
Before he could even get that thought out of his head. The water around him receded. Angelus knew what this meant. Living his entire life on the shore of Babylon, he knew that this meant a wave was coming. Summoning the only powers he had left in him, he shoved his hands for wards as though he was pushing a wall. He created a horizontal cyclone of air, hopefully protecting him from the wave.
Angelus felt his powers being drained as the wave crushed against his cyclone. The water began to swirl in a clockwise motion with the cyclone. Some water was able to bypass Angelus' defense, but he was still able to hold the wave off. "Now," Angelus thought to himself, "what to do with this water?"
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Whiteshadow
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Student - Crow[M:-2180][M:-2390]
It's hard to hold a candle, in the Cold November Rain
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Post by Whiteshadow on Nov 8, 2006 11:15:07 GMT -5
Crow couldn't stand it, he was throwing everything he could at Angelus, and Angelus was sucking up his wave."GGGGGAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Crow shouted as he mustered all his strength, held his rapier up to the sky and shouted "LIGHTNING!"
Lightning shot down form nowhere, illuminating the arena. He saw Angelus with his cyclone, holding his water hostage inside. Crow was granted with amazing speed and agility, as he ran forward with his rapier out. Before Angelus could do anything, he stuck his rapier into the cyclone, and froze it. He swing his sword around and smashed the cyclone into thousands of tiny ice shards, and swung his rapier for the final time, sending them all at Angelus. He retreated back, and fell to his knees catching his breath, his rapier still firm in his hand.
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Angelus
Junior
Suzume's Squishy Student - Angelus[M:2120][M:1100]
A Dark Past...
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Post by Angelus on Nov 8, 2006 11:29:00 GMT -5
((pat...where does it say that you have alighting special attack...you have a water elemental rapier))
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Angelus
Junior
Suzume's Squishy Student - Angelus[M:2120][M:1100]
A Dark Past...
Posts: 1,176
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Post by Angelus on Nov 8, 2006 19:26:51 GMT -5
Angelus held the cyclone shot down from one steady as the lightning shot down from the sky. Angelus saw Crow charging his rapier. He was preparing to attack Crow with his own trapped water but something unexpected happened. Angelus suddenly felt a weight on his hands as well as something cold at the end of his hands. Angelus was unsure what was going on, but he got his answers soon enough.
The weight disappeared suddenly and all too quickly shards of ice began to fly at Angelus. These sharp shards began to cut Angelus up left and right. Angelus jumped back wards spinning his staff quickly attempted to block the shards. Hardly any shards were blocked and Angelus soon was standing up against the wall. He collapsed to the ground with cuts all over his body. He was exhausted.
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Post by baha on Nov 23, 2006 22:54:22 GMT -5
Whiteshadow Content- Good description for the most part, but at times you slightly GM. For instance, in the beginning you controlled how Angelus would react physically to your attack.
Length- Yours would be about a paragraph per post, sometimes a bit less. Nothing more to say about this.
Word use- Nothing outstanding, but you don't repeat a lot of words ^^ kudos!
Battle- The main thing I want to point out is you adding "Pets Welcome" to the first post. You should not add or take away anything from the first post =P. Also, Dan is right with the electric-attack water-elemental-sword. This seems like a paradox to me, so that takes off a bit.
Overall- Though your content could've been a bit better, as well as your word use, it's good that you have a solid one paragraph usually as your post. For this, you earn- 5/10
Angelus Content- Good, precise descriptions of the battle, as well as having thoughts or dialogue in each post. Nothing overdone with PPing or GMing, which is pretty hard to do in a one-on-one battle. Cheers!
Length- The fact that you post double the amount of your opponent does help greatly ;D
Word use- At times, you'll use flashy words that literature teachers would call "warm fuzzies" (dont ask), but for the most of it, it's pretty average.
Battle- Looks like you lost XD. You used your wind-skillz correctly, so alls good
Overall- With a good mixture of fluffy words and good length, as well as interesting content and a non-brakage of da rulez, you earn- a 7/10
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Post by baha on Nov 23, 2006 23:07:58 GMT -5
ANGELUS IS THE WINNERRR!!! You win- 600 SP and an item of your own choice! Post the item here first, please.
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Whiteshadow
Junior
Student - Crow[M:-2180][M:-2390]
It's hard to hold a candle, in the Cold November Rain
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Post by Whiteshadow on Dec 22, 2006 12:38:56 GMT -5
-.- fine take his side XDDD. But anyways, the whole water elemental sword with speed lightning thing, I paid for it so shouldent my character be able to use it anytime? But I agree i did GM a bit. Also I saw the warm fuzzies thing, lol it made me laugh ^^.
P.S. Sorry I got to this board so late, like i said i have been out of it for a while.
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