Sprix
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Post by Sprix on Dec 6, 2008 21:57:56 GMT -5
Name Sprix Aglai Age 13 1/2 years Date of Birth October 16th Homelands Palist Marsh, a marsh where she and her mother and a few other families of sprites have made their homes. It is hidden far from any major cities. Race Sprite Class Wind Elementalist Final Ventus A fairly large tornado is summoned by the caster. It is particularly violent and uncontrollable, and able to pick up young shrubs and bushes, and if they are close enough, people and animals. If the caster is not careful, they may be picked up and thrown by it as well. The tornado will generally last a minute and a half, and it takes an immense amount of energy to conjure.
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{Weapon information} Volatilis Spes A pair of thin, metal fans stained black. When fully fanned out they are very sharp but light. Usually, they are thrown (and at such an angle that they return to the user). Both fans have odd, twisting silver inscriptions. Enchantments; A fairly simple enchantment makes the fans able to shrink and grow as she does, like her clothing.
{Armour Information} Presidium Light, forest-green robes edged with a soft, white hue. The robes are loose and fall to her calfs, and underneath her robes she wears identically colored pants. Her robes have a hood which she often keeps on her head, to hide her face. She wears white cloth shoes. All of her clothing appears to be woven from fibers from vines. Enchantments; When hit, the robes become as tough as leather, but while they are good for protection, they do not fully absorb the blow.
{Accessory Information} Exuo "Exuo" refers to the bright, multi-colored beads in her hair. For the most part, the beads are for decoration, but they can also store a small bit of energy if she thinks she'll need it later. The brighter the bead, the more energy it contains. The colors are usually white, yellow, neon green, red, light blue, and orange.
{Physical Description} Being a sprite, Sprix generally stands at a full eleven inches tall. However, when she wants, she can ascend to a more human-like height of five feet exactly. She wears white-trimmed green robes, identically-colored pants and white cloth shoes. She hides her weapons, two black-stained metal fans, inside the sleeves. Her robes have slits in the back so tha she might open her translucent, dragonfly-like wings without worry of her robes getting in the way. Sprix almost always leave the hood of her robes over her head, but on the occation it'll fall back and one can get a glimpse of her face.
People usually first notice how pale her skin is. It's not completely white, but it does lack much hue. Her hair is the complete opposite, it is a jet black decorated with randomly placed multi-colored beads. There is a small scar near her hairline that is hardly visible. Perhaps Sprix's most prominent feature, however, is her eyes. They are a bright green hue, with a touch of gold near her pupil. There's just one problem that might not be noticible immediately- she's blind. Sprix can, however, find her way around quite nicely, seeing as her ears are sensitive and she can occationally feel vibrations in the air.
{Background} Sprix was born blind in Palist Marsh to her mother and father, Sprin and Sprip (it is a custom of her family's to have the letters "S-p-r-i" to start their name, then have another letter or two at the end). Life in Palist Marsh was fairly enjoyable- there were other families of sprites and the weather was usually warm. The only slight downside was that sometimes the other children would ridicule her for being blind. Sprix had one best friend who never teased her, and that friend was Kipp. Once, when she and Kipp were flying through the branches of the trees in the marsh, she revieved a cut by her hairline- it was neither deep nor serious, but it still scarred. Still, she would often go out and fly- it was her favorite thing to do.
At some point, the other sprite children started excluding her from their games and would hardly talk to her. Sprix didn't particularly know why, but she assumed it was because she was blind. Wanting to prove herself, she told her parents that she wanted to leave and travel. Reluctantly, they let her go, but not before giving her parting gifts. Sprip, her father, gave her the two metal fan. Sprin, her mother, wove her robes from fibers from the nearby vines, and Kipp gave her beads to wear in her hair. Amongst her travels, she heard people talking about Twilight Moon Acadamy, and decided to join.
{Pictures} None...
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Post by ±Witchcraft± on Dec 12, 2008 16:11:24 GMT -5
27/30 Spelling/Grammar Just a few misspelled words, fragments, things like that. Just remember to run a spelling/grammar check before you post a bio since that will catch 90% of the small errors that you can make while typing.
20/30 Originality You picked an interesting combination of race and class as well as making your character blind. This makes her unique to an extent, but there is much more within that can make a person original, such as his or her personality and past events.
20/40 Literacy You lost a lot of points here since you didn’t blend together your items. They seemed like giant blocks of text when I read them. A good writer can blend everything together so it works. It shouldn’t be like you are typing one thing then another, it should be more like you have all of this already known, and you are picking it out piece by piece.
Total: 67/100
Rate: 6.7
APPROVED!
WELCOME TO TMA!
You may now move on to the Ghost Shipyards.
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